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anonymous

  • 5 years ago

Here is my poem :) plesss read it and comment!! pls?!?! :D lol soweee i was told to do it and ther isnt anyone in the English room >.< the poem is ina comment

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  1. anonymous
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    Im so lost you have always told me you'd be here but where are you now!!! My screams cant u hear!? I thought i loved you with everything i had I gave you my all oh and i forgot to add you took my heart from my grasp Between your fingers around my heart ur fingers clasped U tricked me said u'd never leave oh ya we'll be together forever... Look at me now, look how i grieve! Can u see the tears in my eyes? can u see me hide it can u see me hide my cries? Are you even looking to see if im ok? im hurt and u dont care my emotions are all astray but then you pick me up off the ground look at me with those eyes And i realize wow what the hell have i found! someone to love me for all i am treat me with care tho! Bc with one sentence BAM and i cant breathe anger and sadness cloud my vision and with madness i start to seethe You can send me spiraling down losing control real fast In my own tears watch me drown Remember to hold your head up high to always do whats right And dont be afraid to cry Never give in what the hell You decide whats a sin Be yourself and thats all pick yourself up whenever you fall always be strong they cant push u down Bc thats just wrong Lifes a gift not a given rite Dont give in to every rift pusj against the current make your own path Bc if it werent for you and you alone it wouldnt be this way They wouldnt have flown So live it the way u want be who u are And dont let them haunt This is your life live it with strife

  2. anonymous
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    pls comment :)

  3. anonymous
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    I gave you a medal for the poem. If I am good at English, I would say something. Anyway, I am sure whoever you mean by this poem is lucky. :P

  4. anonymous
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    Haha guess what, i didnt write it for anyone!! :D i just.. idk...wrote it? :)

  5. anonymous
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    ^_^ u wanna hear another one? :)

  6. anonymous
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    LOL, That was expected haha

  7. anonymous
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    hear?!

  8. anonymous
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    >:o it was expected!?!?!?!?! well i kinda DID write it for someone well the sad part was written for him cuz he hurt me inside :( then i just rose out of it and well the poem was more for me than him :)

  9. radar
    • 5 years ago
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    Interesting, almost seemed to be about two different people. First half was of self pitying, weak and dependent person, second half more strength and independence.

  10. anonymous
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    Yeah!! Schizophrenia :P

  11. anonymous
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    :) Exactly. Its because i halfway through realized i dont need him, i can live my life how i want WITHOUT having a man hold me down :)

  12. radar
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    Are the comments going to be critiqued?

  13. anonymous
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    Hmmmmm what do you mean by that exactly? :)

  14. radar
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    I meant are the poems responses going to be part of the assignment?

  15. mattfeury
    • 5 years ago
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    I don't get the last line: "this is your life / live it with strife." The last portion seems very empowering, but living with strife is living with conflict, which seems contradictory to its message.

  16. anonymous
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    seems as though the narrator is trapped in love despite the tumultuous relationship, the narrator seems naive

  17. anonymous
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    Why cant you see? Theres nothing else you should be! Its so strange for someone to genuinely care! To give me there love to share! Around you I tend to squeal I cant believe this is actually for real! You are anything but snooty And in me u see beauty! You don’t mind that im strange And you never ever want me to change You think im too good for you When I know its not true I don’t know how I got so lucky to be with someone so…wow I know you’ll be there when I cry Because your just that great a guy. You never sleep! You’re the one I gotta keep Why must we be so far apart You, I would let into my heart. I will never ask for much Only to know your touch Kissing my lips Your hands running down my hips I’d walk many a mile just to see your smile You make me feel sooooo special I bet to feel your kiss Would be total blisssss Y ou make me feel good inside and out And without a doubt in my mind You the best damn thing im ever gonna find :) what do you think of this one? And ahhhhh i was told it meant something much different matt thanks :)

  18. anonymous
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    :) That was a first "fight" of the relationship and believe me the relationship was one of the best i think i have ever had :) it was anything but tumultuous. I just give my all to everyone i sometimes forget to hold bak.... >.<

  19. anonymous
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    cool, maybe this post should be kept in the writing and english group and you can post a link via chat

  20. anonymous
    • 5 years ago
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    Yes but no-one visits it .

  21. mattfeury
    • 5 years ago
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    no one will visit it if there are no posts! feel free to share via chat with people in this group, but try and keep the questions sections focused. liking the poems though :)

  22. anonymous
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    :D im glad u like them :) And alright i will do that then :)

  23. anonymous
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    yeah, keep the creativity flowing, if you post in W&E you might find more like minded poetry fans, and eventually grow a following, maybe some openstudy beatniks...

  24. anonymous
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    There is also a mothers day poem i wrote for my mom :)

  25. anonymous
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    cool, i'll look for that one in the W&E group

  26. mattfeury
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    I like beatniks.

  27. anonymous
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    lol true, true, idk its how i express myself. i mean poetry is passion, and i thrive on passion :) Okie dokie pls comment when you do!! :)

  28. anonymous
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    sure thing

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