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Vinicius_Caldas

  • 4 years ago

Plese, rate this poem. Iced Blood I am a man who lives no love my heart has a kind of steel inside my veins runs iced blood I don´t take account of how you feel. There´s no any emotion I always rather to live alone. Once you were my sunrise My sweet hopes and my ideals I´d spend my times by your side But your feelings weren´t real. Now I understand that in the end the damage was done. I am here with no fear of life, If you were cold, now I am twofold So there´s no sorrow, because you´re out of my world.

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  1. bheeelaat
    • 4 years ago
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    nice I rate it 10, 10is the highest

  2. Vinicius_Caldas
    • 4 years ago
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    Great bheeelaat. you´re cool. Thanks.

  3. bheeelaat
    • 4 years ago
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    welcome bro nice poem keep up

  4. mangodurian
    • 4 years ago
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    Not bad, but English needs correcting in a couple of places: "There´s no any emotion" should be "There´s no emotion" "I always rather to live alone" - "I would rather always live alone" or "I wish to always live alone" or maybe you mean "Oh, that I'd always lived alone!" "I´d spend my times by your side" - "I'd spend my time by your side" nice poem otherwise, but i hope it doesn't reflect you mental state of being! good luck!

  5. Vinicius_Caldas
    • 4 years ago
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    Great, Mangodurian. My english is bad because I´m not a native english speaker (I´m a brazilian). Thanks for corrections. By this way, I learn a little more. Thanks again. P.S: I am not a iced man, because of this I´ve written this poem.

  6. nona18
    • 4 years ago
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    good but try little less sadness

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