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shenita05

can some read this letter i am writing for reinstatwement and critique it

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  1. shenita05
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    To whom it may concern, My name is Shawnice Salisbury, I am writing this letter to request for reinstatement, to the job which I held at the Baltimore City Detention Center where I served as an correctional officer 2.On December 16,2008 I felt victim to excessive force and an officer who faulsified legal documentation to cover up his actions. Based upon those charges I was later terminated by my employer but was not found guilty of these charges in court. I am now relieved from all charges and would like to have my job as a correctional officer. It has been a priviledge to serve for Baltimore City Detention Center and I would never do anything to bring dishonor to myself or employer. My employer terminating me has effected me financially, and also prevented me from successfully being a candidate of hire. While I disagree of the action to terminate me based on pending charges that I faced, I completely understand why my employer did as such. I understand that our mission statement is to protect the public,our employees and our offenders. Actions that is not consistent with the Department of Public Satefy and Correctional Services standard of conduct one should be held accountable for. I believe that my actions of being a productive citizen and serving DPSCS for about a year and three months should be taken into consideration to be reinstated. I have wore my badge honestly and have served with pride and loyalty. To conclude, I have grown from this mentally and is more motivated to continue to strive for excellence. I am now a college student who is studying criminal justice and will not allow any obstacles or challenges to stop me from being succsessfull. Thank you for taking this time to read my request! Best regards, Shawnice Salisbury

    • 2 years ago
  2. maastroff
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    Find out who the letter is going to. If it can be helped, to whom it may concern should not be used. Address it to that person directly.

    • 2 years ago
  3. maastroff
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    And now for editing: My name is Shawnice Salisbury. I am writing this letter to request that I be reinstated at the Baltimore City Detention Center as an correctional officer 2(*).On December 16, 2008 I was a victim to excessive force and an officer who falsified legal documents to cover up his actions. Based upon those charges, I was later terminated by my employer. However, I was found not guilty of these charges in court. I am now acquitted of all charges and would like to have my job back as a correctional officer. It has been a privilege to serve the Baltimore City Detention Center, and I would never do anything to bring dishonor to myself or my employer. My termination has effected me financially and has greatly hindered my ability to find further employment. While I disagree with my termination based on the former pending charges, I completely understand why my employer acted in such a manner. I understand that the Detention Center's mission statement is to protect the public, our employees and our offenders. Any person not acting in a way that is with the Department of Public Satefy and Correctional Services standard of conduct one should be held accountable. I believe that my service to the DPSCS for over a year should be taken into consideration for my re-installation. I have worn my badge with honesty and have served with pride and loyalty. To conclude, I have grown from this mentally and am more motivated to continue to strive for excellence. I am now a college student and am studying criminal justice. I will not allow any obstacles or challenges to stop me from being succsessfull. Thank you for taking this time to read my request. (*) I have no idea what this "2" is here for. If it serves a purpose, then leave it, if not, take it out.

    • 2 years ago
  4. maastroff
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    If I missed something I apologize. I'm in a bit of a rush as I'm off to class. Best of luck.

    • 2 years ago
  5. maastroff
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    successful. in the second to last sentence. i missed the misspelling X(

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  6. maastroff
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    *formerly pending charges

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  7. maastroff
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    Any person acting contrary to the Department of Public Safety and Correctional Services standard of conduct should be held accountable. I believe that my 15 months of service to the DPSCS should be taken into consideration for my re-installation.

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  8. maastroff
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    ok, now I'm really done.

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  9. carlsmith
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    My name is Shawnice Salisbury. I am writing this letter to request I be reinstated to the position I held at the Baltimore City Detention Center, where I served as a correctional officer. On December 16, 2008, I was a victim of an incidence of excessive force, involving an officer who falsified legal documentation to cover up his actions. Based upon those charges, I was dismissed from the position I held, but was never convicted of anything. There are no outstanding matters, and no reason I should not be allowed to resume my position as a correctional officer. It has been a privilege to serve for Baltimore City Detention Center. I have grown from this experience. I now feel more motivated than ever to strive for excellence. I am currently attending college, studying criminal justice, and I am absolutely committed to success as a professional in this field. Thank you very much for taking this time to consider my request. Best regards, Shawnice Salisbury

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  10. carlsmith
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    At a glance, that'd be my next edit Shawnice. You don't want to waste time stressing the givens, just push home the key points, then let them consider it. That's just my opinion.

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  11. carlsmith
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    It still needs some work, but you should expect to write a good letter a fair few times before you send it.

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  12. Mally
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    My name is Shawnice Salisbury, I am writing this letter to request reinstatement to my former position which I held at Baltimore City Detention Center serving as a correctional officer 2*. On 16 December 2008 I was a victim of excessive force by an officer who later falsified legal documents to cover his actions. Based on those charges I was terminated by my employer yet not found guilty of these charges in court. I am now relieved of all charges and am graciously requesting my previous job as a correctional officer back. It was been a privilege serving Baltimore City Detention Center and I would never willingly dishonor myself or my employer. My termination has affected me financially and has also prevented me from becoming a candidate for hire. While I disagree with the action to terminate me based on pending charges, I completely understand why my employer did as such. I understand that our mission statement is to protect the public, our employees, and our offenders. Any person that is not consistent with the Department of Public Safety and Correctional Services code of conduct should be held accountable for. I believe that my efforts in being a productive citizen and the work I accomplished for the DPSCS should be taken into consideration as my situation is evaluated. I wore my badge honestly and served with pride and loyalty. To conclude, I have grown from this mentally and have become more motivated to continue striving for excellence. I have recently enrolled at (Name of college) to study criminal law and will not allow any obstacles or challenges to keep me from becoming successful. Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to your response.

    • 2 years ago
  13. Mally
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    I also have no idea what the 2 is for. In any case, good luck!

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  14. carlsmith
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    Maybe do... Today, there are no outstanding matters, and no reason I should not be allowed to resume my position as a correctional officer. It has been a privilege to serve for Baltimore City Detention Center, and I would very much like to regain the pride I had in myself as an officer of that institution.

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    On December 16, 2008, I was a victim of an incidence of excessive force, involving an officer who falsified legal documentation to cover his actions. Based upon those charges, I was dismissed from the position I held, but I was innocent of any wrongdoing, and was consequently found to be so when the case came to court.

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    Best of luck with it all anyway Shawnice.

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  17. gylvx
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    To whom it may concern, My name is Shawnice Salisbury, I am writing this letter to request for reinstatement, to that job which I held at the Baltimore City Detention Center where I served as a correctional officer. On the day of December 16th,2008 I felt victim to excessive force and an officer who falsified legal documentation to cover up his actions. Based upon those charges I was later terminated by my employer, but was not found guilty of these charges in court. I am now relieved from all charges and would like to have my job as a correctional officer. It has been a privilege to serve for Baltimore City Detention Center and I would never do anything to bring dishonor to my employer or me. My employer terminating me has effected me financially, and also prevented me from successfully being a candidate of hire. While I disagree of the action to terminate me based on pending charges that I faced. I completely understand my employer's actions. I also understand that our mission statement is to protect the public, our employees and our offenders. Actions that are not consistent with the Department of Public Satefy and Correctional Services standard of conduct one should be held accountable for. I believe that my actions of being a productive citizen and serving DPSCS for about a year and three months should be taken into consideration to be reinstated. I have worn my badge honestly and have served with pride and loyalty. To conclude, I have grown from this mentally and is more motivated to continue to strive for excellence. I am now a college student who is studying criminal justice and will not allow any obstacles or challenges to stop me from being successful. Thank you for taking this time to read my request!

    • 2 years ago
  18. junwagh
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    There's a lot more wrong here than simple grammar and syntax. You alluded to charges you were not found guilty of but never expressly stated them. What charges were you brought up on? You say you were a victim to excessive force, indicated you were assaulted. Was it you who assaulted the other officer? Who falsified documents. If you are trying to convey a contrite tone that second to last sentence has to go. I can edit other small grammar details but I think ou have to correct that one major inconsistency first.

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