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moongazer

  • 4 years ago

This is a poem about God as my inspiration help me to improve it

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  1. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    Please help me in doing this I need some suggestions and please fix my poem if i made mistakes. it should be 5 stanzas with 4 lines I already start ted this stanzas: Oh God the mighty God You gave me the best kind of love You gave me joy when i'm in pain You gave me strength when i am weak You made the light that makes me see You made the humans that makes me want to live You made the breath-taking landscapes that makes me dream Oh God the creator you are so extraordinary When I'm alone You are always there When I made mistakes You always forgive me

  2. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    You are my friend You are my idol You are my inspiration You are my protector

  3. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    i think so.

  4. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    is my poem good?

  5. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    yes it's good.

  6. moongazer
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    did I made mistakes?

  7. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    but you can edit it like this:-oh god than no need of oh mighty god.

  8. moongazer
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    please help me in putting punctuation marks

  9. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    and it not when i am in pain ,it when i was in pain.

  10. moongazer
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    what do you suggest for my last stanza?

  11. ashwin
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    can you bring some ryhming words with it.

  12. ashwin
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    it will be ended beautifully.

  13. ashwin
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    anywayz i like your poem.

  14. moongazer
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    ok Thanks! :)

  15. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    hey i realy think if you polish your skill little bit more you can be a fine poet.

  16. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    what about this? for the ending You are special to me Cause you make me see All the beautiful things around me ................................??????

  17. ashwin
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    oh thanks !but this was ,i think you are a beginner.if so you have a long way to go before you sleep.

  18. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    wow! thanks for the compliment, actually this is the first time that I made a poem this long.

  19. moongazer
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    that's why it is not that good

  20. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    see i told you,but this was a very nice poem than.

  21. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    and i am also making mistakes at my grammar,nevertheless, I hope i can make my grammar better before i graduate from high school and I will try to make poems if I have nothing to do, because of your compliment Thanks :)

  22. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    I hope that I can be an engineer and a good English speaker

  23. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    ^_^

  24. ashwin
    • 4 years ago
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    see no one is 100% perfect ,not even me.but only one thing gives you 90% output and that will be practice and 10% god will give you.ok!friend.

  25. moongazer
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    ok! :)

  26. Fools101
    • 4 years ago
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    Awww Moongazer i love it !!! ^ ^ and God Bless U!

  27. sofiamoin
    • 4 years ago
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    Its so peeeeerty!

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