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moongazer

  • 4 years ago

This is my poem. please correct all the mistakes that I made and help me in improving it. I am not good in writing poem. :)

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  1. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    The title is " The happiness of Success" Fear to the unknown tired of all the failures regret to the things I missed Creating many mistakes You must not give up You should strive hard to achieve your desired goal giving you a feeling of fulfillment Inspiration give you determination to continue in achieving your goal Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas for it will give you a fresh knowledge At the end of all the obstacles you fought You will enjoy the happiness of success It should be a poem with 5 stanzas of 4 lines

  2. anonymous
    • 4 years ago
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    try to write about the drying human initiative and our being trapped in an illusion of the truth

  3. anonymous
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    moon pls reply

  4. anonymous
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    ur line of inspiration can be modified..

  5. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    I'm back now. My teacher said that we should write a poem about our success

  6. anonymous
    • 4 years ago
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    ok.... success can be in the wordly or material sense...

  7. anonymous
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    to be successful u need a source of inspiration which can be a thought eg.marxism ,a man eg gandhi, or god....

  8. moongazer
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    Did I made any grammatical mistakes?

  9. anonymous
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    for eg....walking on the street of life being alone in the meddling crowd i keep on trying to find a light which can lead me to a eternal life

  10. anonymous
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    no , u were fine with the grammar

  11. anonymous
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    how was my poetry?

  12. anonymous
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    challenges,hindrances keep on coming but i m a rock still and steady, this world is just a faction of the universe that guides me

  13. anonymous
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    i used a metaphor of a rock

  14. moongazer
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    Your poetry is good.

  15. moongazer
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    I just need to fill up the missing lines.

  16. anonymous
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    what are those line?

  17. moongazer
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    it should have four lines

  18. moongazer
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    could you give me an idea what to add?

  19. anonymous
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    ok.....the goal may be a distant dream but u are a survivor not a broken soul

  20. anonymous
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    ideas are the seeds of a bright future full of prosperity and life

  21. moongazer
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    inspiration gives you determination to continue in achieving your goal Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream otherwise make them as your inspiration Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas for it will give you a fresh knowledge At the end of all the obstacles you fought You will enjoy the happiness of success

  22. moongazer
    • 4 years ago
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    I added "Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream otherwise make them as your inspiration" could you improve it I think it sounds bad :)

  23. anonymous
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    let not ur critics hinder u from achieving ur goals take inspiration from the good present in them

  24. moongazer
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    Thanks for that. That is the word that I am looking for. ^_^

  25. anonymous
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    ok.......now what?

  26. anonymous
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    u are in which grade?

  27. moongazer
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    4th year high school, I am not that good in English and I am not a Native English speaker

  28. moongazer
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    inspiration gives you determination to continue in achieving your goal Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream otherwise make them as your inspiration Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas for it will give you a fresh knowledge Don't be afraid to ask someone for help For they are here to help you After all the challenges, and hindrances You have surpassed You will realize that anything is possible If you just have perseverance and determination I already added some lines. could you Improve it?

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