I need crits and suggestions<3
There is no home to return to.
The last light fades away.
All is lost, the Black sun rises,
As Darkness shrouds your way.
All good in the world has perished,
New eras, no longer ours.
The days of man have ended,
Replaced with lifeless hours.
Moments of death sear all memories
Pain is no foreign concept
And death lurks in every shadow
The smoke of burning and pure hate chokes the trees
Losses of nature that signal destruction"
Without you Frodo Baggins, this will be our new home.
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the only part i thought was weird was the "black sun"
Well if you are familiar with LOTR, J R R talks about darkness and Legolas mentions a Red sun. It's derived from that concept.
red does sound better i guess, but if you like it keep it. i was just pointing it out.