## KnitWit 2 years ago If anyone could look at my song-in progress, that'd be great: I just can’t hurt you But I don’t know what to do I can’t say the words What would I do afterwards? But then you lost trust And I had to adjust You left in a fit of rage As if placing me in a cage I know I should leave behind All these thoughts in my mind And these feelings in my heart But I don’t know how to start… But I’m finding it impossible I just am not able To forget

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1. kymber

Didn't involve enough spaghetti.

2. countonme123

let's hear how it sounds then we can tell you what to fix

3. kymber

Suggestion: "I know I should leave behind All $$\it{this\ spaghetti}$$ in my mind"

4. KnitWit

?? I can't fully figure out the melody and I need to work on my voice before I sing it. Plus I have a cold now.

5. bri18

i liked it(:

6. KnitWit

7. kymber

Another suggestion: "You left in a fit of rage As if placing me in a cage $$\it{filled\ with\ spaghetti}$$"

8. KnitWit

Thanks, Bri. This is about something that just happened, like a bit ago in my life, so... it's not just by someone who knows nothing about the experiences in the song...

9. KnitWit

Kymber, if you don't have a real suggestion that makes sense, please get out of my question!!!

10. kymber

These are nice lyrics, but if you added some spaghetti, it would be perfect :)

11. kymber

:| My suggestions make perfect sense. No need to be rude.

12. KnitWit

13. countonme123

spaghetti does sound good right now

14. KnitWit

I'm sorry. I didn't mean it that way. I just meant it doesn't go with the meter of the song...

15. countonme123

true dat

16. KnitWit

17. kymber

You could just ignore my suggestions, then :| Oh and, did you know there's a music group? You could post this song there, too. http://openstudy.com/study#/groups/Music

18. KnitWit

Oh? Thanks for THAT suggestion!

19. kymber

$$\Huge\ddot\smile$$

20. KnitWit

How did you do that?

21. kymber

It's $$\LaTeX$$.

22. kymber

It's \ddot\smile

23. KnitWit

Ok...

24. Agent_Sniffles

I agree with Kymber.