KnitWit If anyone could look at my song-in progress, that'd be great: I just can’t hurt you But I don’t know what to do I can’t say the words What would I do afterwards? But then you lost trust And I had to adjust You left in a fit of rage As if placing me in a cage I know I should leave behind All these thoughts in my mind And these feelings in my heart But I don’t know how to start… But I’m finding it impossible Yeah, I'm finding it impossible I just am not able I'm sadly unable To forget one year ago one year ago

1. kymber

You can edit questions, you know. :P

2. KnitWit

Oh....

3. kymber

$$\Huge\ddot\smile$$

4. KnitWit

Just remember, a cold greatly changes the quality of my voice, I need to work on my voice, and I have a bad quality microphone. This is just to give people who look at this an idea...

5. KnitWit

ddot/smile

6. KnitWit

ddotsmile

7. KnitWit

d dot smile

8. kymber

You need to enclose it in $$9. kymber and$$

10. KnitWit

$$ddot/smile$$

11. bngaure

i like it it would sound cool with a piano instrumental behind it

12. kymber

It's \ddot\smile

13. KnitWit

$$\ddot\smile$$

14. KnitWit

GOT IT!

15. kymber

$$\Huge\ddot\smile$$ $$\Huge\mathsf{Yay!}$$

16. KnitWit

I play piano, @bngaure !

17. KnitWit

But my voice isn't too good, even under normal circumstances. I also play guitar. Which do you think would sound better?

18. KnitWit

Did you listen to the mp3s, @bngaure

19. bngaure

your voice sounds fine to mee with music behind it it will sound even better.

20. KnitWit

Thanks. You're not just saying that ?

21. KnitWit

I'm a very low alto though. Most people don;t like that at all for a girl... They only like sopranos...

22. bngaure

no haha i actually prefer deeper voices. um take etta james for example her voice is even deeper then yours oh and adele shes not a soprano either.

23. KnitWit

Ok. Thanls. But you're not just saying mine is good as a complinment?

24. KnitWit

I can't type today...

25. countonme123

that was a fail in my opinion. almost the whole song you are like aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

26. KnitWit

Ok. First of all, look at the comment. "Just remember, a cold greatly changes the quality of my voice, I need to work on my voice, and I have a bad quality microphone. This is just to give people who look at this an idea..."

27. KnitWit

Kymber, PLEASE don't agree with him!!!

28. countonme123

ok ok well you indeed need to pass that cold, then you need a good beat, and after that you will have a great song! PS : and a better mic

29. kymber

I can't listen to it now, I'm at school :|

30. KnitWit

I don't have the MONEY for a better mic!!! And, yes, I KNOW my voice needs work.

31. KnitWit

Ok. Well, I'm just glad you didn't agree with him...

32. KnitWit

@bngaure : You're not just SAYING I'm good?

33. kymber

Also, I just want to say that when you post things like this on the internet, expect negative feedback.

34. countonme123

true dat

35. bngaure

no im not just saying that i only lie if it will benefit me, i think that with an instrumental behind it your gonna have yourself a good song

36. KnitWit

I know, but not totally neg, but just say ONE thing you loked, or say a way to fix it along with the negatives...

37. KnitWit

Thanks. I just went through a lot, so I wrote this to help, and to make a song others will like.

38. jazy

@kymber is right, not everyone is gonna give positive feedback. My opinion is that your voice IS a bit hard to hear. However the song lyrics are really good, and maybe with some backround music or a beat...you never know ^_^

39. countonme123

get a catchy beat or tune.... you NEED it. but honestly how can you expect your song to be great with a mic like that. you wanna sound crystal clear.

40. kymber

Well, KnitWit, he did say a way to fix it and you weren't very appreciative.

41. KnitWit

Thanks! I wasn't expecting fully positive, just a bit of gold with the rocks, so to speak. @kymber But not in the same comment. That's what I hoped for, constructive crit, but in the same thing, a way to fix it, or a part that they liked...

42. countonme123

i like.....................the words ^_^

43. KnitWit

Thanks!

44. KnitWit

But not my voice... I'm trying...

45. kymber

The words are okay.. but could use some spaghetti. "I just can’t hurt you But I don’t know what to do $$\it{with\ all\ this\ spaghetti\ flowing\ out\ of\ my\ pockets}$$."

46. KnitWit

You said that similarly in the other question...

47. countonme123

i honestly hope you clear up your voice, add a good beat, and make a bajillion dollars on a great new song :)

48. kymber

"I just am not able I'm sadly unable To $$\it{staunch\ the\ flow\ of\ spaghetti\ from\ my\ pockets}$$."

49. KnitWit

Thanks! I know, my voice needs work, but I'm trying, my dad's helping, and I'm pianoing... oh wait, that ing doesn't work...

50. KnitWit

I don'r have the money for a new mic, and this is just a trial thing...

51. KnitWit

to try out the song, etc...

52. bri18

i enjoyed the lyrics of your song. keep working on your voice(:

53. KnitWit

Thanks! You saw the wmas?

54. KnitWit

Oh wait, you didn't.

55. KnitWit

I've got to go. Be back on Monday.

56. thangeram

$\Huge\ddot\smile$

57. Ellyg

i like it a lot! great job!

58. 0-h-darling

it's really good! you're very talented x

59. TestTakingLifesaver

Great Job! Cingratulations! Do you mind if I refer you to a talent agency my friend works for? I think you have some serious talent! Test Taking Lifesaver

60. kjhgfd

Test Taking Lifesaver there's a reason your friend works for the talent agency and not you

61. TestTakingLifesaver

Dear kjhgfd, Your Right! I work for google! Im better off! Thanks for that!

62. countonme123

@TestTakingLifesaver haha good one

63. TestTakingLifesaver

Thanks!

64. dopek.i.d.s

its f'in dope kid ;D beautiful keep adit