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AvengerVirus

  • 2 years ago

Can any one please take a look in my paragraph and tell me how good if it and what is considered wrong.

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  1. AvengerVirus
    • 2 years ago
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    English is not my first language so i wish u help me to correct wrongs and if there is better Topic sentence better than mine and thanks>> First of all, living in a big city is more modern than one in countryside and living in countryside is quieter than one in city. Both countryside and city has their own values and they offer different services. They have different advantages and disadvantages. In countryside, the life is very peaceful and safe. The neighborhood is very friendly and generous; also people don't worry much about the style of the life too much. People in countryside can enjoy their life with the nice fresh air in there. They can share each other everything such as fruits, foods, and clothing. The less transportation and more green places such as gardens make countryside become more beautiful and healthy. On the contrary, education in countryside is a serious problem. High school graduation rates in countryside are always lower than one in a big city. Consequently, countryside is the most ideal place for people who want healthy atmosphere and peaceful aspect of living. In city, People feel more comfortable and convenient. Although less transportation is good in countryside, the more of public transportations such as the bus and train are always available to support people and make life in city easier. The high education is one of the reasons that makes living in city better than countryside. The security is always available and ready to solve any problem at city like robbery, violation,etc. In short, living in countryside is more peaceful and none-stressful, but people living a big city usually have enough supporting services for them. Also there are many things that can be found in city not in country side like health care service, the 24-hour services, many means entertainment, and advanced technology. The governments always take care of city more than countryside. In conclusion, people have their own choices to decide to live in countryside or a big city. As I can see, most of old people probably tend to live in countryside. However, other people want their own life comfortable and convenient. For me or even my future family, I would prefer to live in a big city because of the modern life, high education, and good health care.

  2. AvengerVirus
    • 2 years ago
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    the topic about City vs. Countryside

  3. nymphenchantress
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    First of all, living in a big city is more modern than one in countryside, and living in countryside is quieter than one in city. Both countryside and city has their own values and they offer different services. They have different advantages and disadvantages. In countryside, the life is very peaceful and safe. The neighborhood is very friendly and generous; also people don't worry much about the style of the life too much. People in countryside can enjoy their life with the nice fresh air in there. They can share each other everything such as fruits, foods, and clothing. The less transportation and more green places such as gardens make countryside become more beautiful and healthy. On the contrary, education in countryside is a serious problem. High school graduation rates in countryside are always lower than one in a big city. Consequently, countryside is the most ideal place for people who want healthy atmosphere and peaceful aspect of living. In city, People feel more comfortable and convenient. Although less transportation is good in countryside, the more of public transportations such as the bus and train are always available to support people and make life in city easier. The high education is one of the reasons that make’s living in city better than countryside. The security is always available and ready to solve any problem at city like robbery, violation, ect. In short, living in countryside is more peaceful and none-stressful, but people living a big city usually have enough supporting services for them. Also there are many things that can be found in city not in country side like health care service, the 24-hour choices to decide to live in countryside or a big city. As I can see, most of old people probably tend to live in countryside. However, other people want their own life comfortable and convenient. For me or even my future family, I would prefer to live in a big city because of the modern life, high education, and good health care. services, many means entertainment, and advanced technology. The governments always take care of city more than countryside. In conclusion, people have their own You only had 3 things misspelled I fixed that for you, what you need to do is make it more interesting, put a bit of a twist on it like make it seem like an article BUT OTHER THAN THAT IT IS GREAT :D!!!! If most people born in america can't write a paper that good I would never know that English wasn't your first language. :D good job !!

  4. AvengerVirus
    • 2 years ago
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    Thanks you but do u think the style of paragraph is good or should i write it like u without spaces ??!

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