Can someone help me edit my essay, or make corrections/ improvements. Thank you! attachment enclosed.
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First correction.. first paragraph you have a repeat where it says "Everyone one" the one needs to be deleted..
You will need to rewrite this.
Your first paragraph should say WHO and WHY or HOW. You need THREE reasons why or how your dad had made an impact on your life. You also need a thesis. Your thesis and your reasons can be combined. "My father has made the most impact on my life through this-and-that, blah-blah-blah, and such-and-such."
Then, you will need to write one paragraph on EACH reason.
Then, you need a conclusion. This will summarize your paper. You should mention your three reasons, again, as well as your thesis.