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Goten77

  • 3 years ago

so i wrote a short love story, it takes maybe 30 seconds to read would any1 tell me their thoughts on it? i just want peoples opinions theres no right/wrong answer and eh english section is inactive so a boyfriend calls up his girl friend boyfriend: hey babe girlfriend: oh hey wasup babe boyfriend: honey we need to talk girlfriend: oh wasup? boyfriend: i have herpes, i really think you should get your self checked out girlfriend: oh my god boyfriend: will you stay with me? girlfriend: what? boyfriend: will you stay with me even knowing that i have herpes? girlfriend in depressed voice: yes.... boyfriend: babe girlfriend: yes hun boyfriend: i dont have herpes.... i just needed 2 know if you'd stay with me

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  1. e.cociuba
    • 3 years ago
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    Yea, it’s pretty good, but i would consider using a disease like cancer. Herpes is not as severe as cancer is. It would make the poem sound a bit more drastic and sound more devastating.

  2. Goten77
    • 3 years ago
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    but herpes = can b given to some1 else... get how its better?

  3. LizzyLove<3
    • 3 years ago
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    |dw:1359688416919:dw|Wow thats really funny in a way...and soo sweet...!! Thats shows the they are in love, even though he faked something like tht:)<3

  4. geerky42
    • 3 years ago
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    I agree, herpes is good enough. And nice story, by the way, @Goten77 . I like it.

  5. Goten77
    • 3 years ago
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    its so sad ;'(

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