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AngelDreamGurl

  • 3 years ago

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  1. AngelDreamGurl
    • 3 years ago
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    Shana allowed her feet to mold against the coarse sand, slowly picking up her pace as she went. She stopped when she was at her special spot, where she couldn’t go any further due to the fact that the grainy sand turned into thick stones. She sat quietly on the edge of the shore, and let her thoughts wander as the tips of the frothy waves tickled her toes.

  2. sarahi_smiles
    • 3 years ago
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    It's really good!

  3. Xtasy0xy
    • 3 years ago
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    Very good, is this going to be a short story?

  4. AngelDreamGurl
    • 3 years ago
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    Yes it's a short story.

  5. AngelDreamGurl
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    anything you'd change?

  6. Xtasy0xy
    • 3 years ago
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    It's pretty much perfect, of course if you wanted to change it then you don't really need "allowed" it could just be "let", so it would be "Shana let her feet mold against the coarse sand".

  7. Xtasy0xy
    • 3 years ago
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    This definitely has potential, so see it through, i'd love to read it.

  8. tayluvsya
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    its good

  9. Comm.Dan
    • 3 years ago
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    Holy crud this is very good writing, I could only write like that if I took the time, too.

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