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A young soul lay dying, In defining lying, Plying with that of life, Discovering the secret of that of the undying, Denying death and his mercenaries he flees trying, Into the heart, The walls thick and protecting, Life passes slowly his surroundings dying, Quick escape is your only fate, Get out, Get out, Die trying, Tubes and machines are what keeps you alive, Keeps his heart beating, His lungs filling, Don’t run away from what lays ahead, It keeps you here binding, Come out, Come out, See Mother Earth again, We’ll see young soul, Prolonging this a little longer, You’ll make it through, The world has just begun, And yet you lay dying, Try living, and not trying, Stand up, gather your strength, Rise up and continue onward, You’re safe, You have lived.
A young soul, dying. idk i tried lol
That's what counts xD!
Out. i think that cuz u say it at least like 4 times and also u r kinda talking about how u got out of like umm a depression or something..
Also a good name! :) And yes this poem can be about depression but it's not focused on me, it's just in general :) Good job analyzing :P
:) thanks n glad u like it, just tryna help! n it is a good poem!
thank you too! ^_^
I think 'You’re Safe' has a nice effect on it. It's like the happy ending of the poem. :) It also gets the reader wondering why you're safe, so it pulls him/her in to read the whole thing:)
Lay dying,try living.. maybe xD
@DragonFall Nice poem......well a title for this one huh!!! Well if the warrior is in a state where the doctors are telling him that he cannot survive but he survives....well for tht I will give u a title MIRACLES DO HAPPEN,THE DYING SOULS BELIEF,....ETC
well you could name it The dying soul miracles that happen dont die little soul theirs a lot fo things you can name it.
Thanks for all your suggestions! :)