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TO BE CONTINUED :p
@razor99 I like the description in your story, Good Job!
I'm stil reading it though
Is this present tense or past tense?
lol present i guess
When you wrote: "Cheyenne voice broked into my deep thinking in my mind" it should be written: "Cheyenne voice broke into my deep thinking in my mind"
yea thanx i will correct it
or Cheyenne voice broke into my deep thoughts in my mind.
You wrote: "Cheynne said holding her hand over her mouth" It would be easier if you just said: "Cheynne said covering her mouth disgustedly."
You wrote: As I spoked to the co-pilots. The character was speaking with only one pilot?
And i think that's about it. I'm looking forward to read more :)
no no the chatacter was speaking with both of them
thanx for the help
Oh sorry...My bad :O
done it with correction
never expected that lol :D
Great Job! :D
hahahahaha i love my story thats why
Thanx to u u deserve credit for that
Omg visitors C:
lol what ya think
That was a Awesome Story man!!!!
Why is this at the top of the English section if it was written a year ago? XD