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What do you need help with specifically?
Can you check this sentence and let me know if it need to be corrected. I'm originally from russia
Mom, Dad, Jing Mei are living in San Fransisco, California Chinatown. It takes place in her home and in Mr. Chong's house, and at the talent show at church.
it's all good! one question, who's home is it? Is it Mom, Dad, and Jing Mei's home?
yep then the sentence is perfect! although you might want to say Mom's house instead of her, just to make it easier for the reader :)
ok thank you so much
i have another one :)
It was very important to her mother that her friends and family came, and it makes bigger conflicts between the mother and daughter.
who is "her"?
it doesnt say the name of the mother in the story
Jing mei's mother
ohh ok. so Jing mei is the daughter?
So to let the reader know who "her" is, you should put Jing mei instead for the first one ;) so like this: It was very important to Jing Mei's mother that her friends and family came, and it makes bigger conflicts between the mother and daughter. Instead of "makes" i think you should put cause, it'll be a better word ;) but the rest is perfect!!!!! :D
i mean "causes"
@littlenugget Story told through Jing-Mei personal perspective, and the mother is who the main conflicts is with.
what exactly do you mean by this? like is the mom having a good life because of her daughter? ohhh ok :) thanks, that'll help a lot :)
@littlenugget do you see it now
Yes! you should put: The story is told through Jing-Mei's personal perspective, and the mother is who the main conflict is with.
@littlenugget Human vs Herself. Jing Mei is struggling to figure out who she is.
yep that one's good :)
@littlenugget It sets up a conflict with Jing mei. "American was where my mother's hopes lay" from book called Two KInds