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Now is this actually for a paper or is this just an exercise in creating thesis statements?
This is for a 2 page essay!
Have you already done your research and come up with the three points that you want to discuss?
Well I know that I wanted to discuss that despite what society says about the female gender, I have continued to live my life the way a person of any gender would live, society has pressured young women to conform to conventional roles and I have personally resisted the conformity by standing up for myself and doing what makes me happy rather than doing what a female should "typically" do. Does that even make any sense?
Two more questions: What level of writing are you doing? and are you interested in learning how to create very effective thesis statements every time you need to?
Well the class I'm currently in is English 1312, and yes, I am very interested in how to make the thesis statement for this essay as well as future ones effective! :)
Okay, so college level upper division. I ask those questions because I have answered this question many many times on OpenStudy and it is helpful to know what level the student is so I can tailor the response accordingly. You'll have to give me a few minutes because to show you and easy way to draft good thesis statements takes a bit more than a few sentences, plus I'm at work, so I have to allow for interruptions. Please be patient.
Of course, your help is truly appreciated. I cannot thank you enough! :)
When developing your thesis and its statement, thoroughly research your subject. Knowing all the pros and cons to your argument will not only solidify your understanding of the subject, it will be crucial in developing your thesis statement. After I have done my research, I like to do a little bit of free writing on the subject, just to get some of my thoughts out on paper. This is not always necessary, but you will probably find it helpful because it will bring out your thoughts and understanding on the subject and help you develop your argument. It will also often bring up the materials that you need to develop your statement. When you start working on your thesis statement, you want to start by defining four things: 1. Your opinion or argument 2. The strongest point supporting your argument. 3. The second strongest point supporting your argument. 4. The strongest point against your argument. These things will become the foundation for your thesis statement and the substance of your argument. The three points (2-4) will become the talking points of your paper. Some argue, "why should I include the strongest point against my argument? Isn't this counterproductive to what I ultimately want to accomplish, which is win the reader to my side of the argument?" The answer to this is "no" and here is why. When you are writing a persuasive essay, you definitely want to create a strong argument. And your two supporting points are going to be your vehicle to do this. But it is important to have that point against because a) it will show that you are not being biased, b) it will show that you did your homework (research), and c) that you are not afraid to let your evidence and argument stand up against the strongest point against it. For example, if you write a persuasive essay and you only include points that support your argument, those who know your subject matter well enough (like your instructor) are going to see that you did not consider that very important contrary point (remember, it is the strongest point against your argument. So ignoring it in the hopes that it will go away or not be noticed is not realistic). Ultimately you will come off as biased and lose credibility. So having this contrary point will actually improve your paper if you argue it right. Once you have these four elements state each in a simple sentence, i.e., Cats make better pets than dogs. Once you have a sentence for each element, you can plug them right into a thesis statement template with very little alteration. There are many templates with different connecting words and such, but most follow these three structures: Even though [contrary point], [your argument] because [strongest supporting point] and [second strongest supporting point]. OR [Your argument] because [first or second strongest supporting point]. OR While [contrary point], [your argument]. A lot of instructors that I have had want to see something more like the first template, where you mention in your statement all the elements of your argument. The other templates are more concise and to the point of your argument and are perfectly fine to use, but be sure you know what your instructor is looking for in a thesis statement. Many prefer the first example because it tells them exactly what they will be reading in one complete sentence. Also, even though you use one of the more concise templates, you still want to cover all the points that you came up with for your paper. Just because you don't mention these things in your statement does not mean you can leave them out. They should be mentioned in your introduction and covered in your body. To close I will give you a very (intentionally) simple example. Let's say the syllabus gives me the broad topic of "cats as pets". After doing my research I might come up with the foillowing: 1. Cats make better pets than dogs. (opinion) 2. Cats are more cuddly. (strongest point) 3. Cats don't slobber on you. (2nd strongest point) 4. Dogs are more loyal than cats. (counter point) With those I might come up with the following thesis statements: Even though dogs are more loyal than cats, cats make better pets than dogs because cats are more cuddly and cats don't slobber on you. OR Cats make better pets than dogs because they are more cuddly. OR While dogs tend to be more loyal, cats still make better pets. Sorry it took so long. Hopefully you've found this rather long post helpful and thanks for your patience.
By the way I would be more than happy to look at what you finally come up with and critique it if you want.
Thank you so much for taking time out of your busy schedule to explain all of this to me! This was very helpful! I am working on a thesis statement right now and will post it later. Thank you so much again!
No problem and if yu need any more help or more explanation just ask.