I would like a critique of this writing I did, I would like an opinion from some of you literary experts :) http://seanlevan.tumblr.com/
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I'm certainly no expert nor am I the best of writers but I can tell a pretty good story. The feel is strict and pretentious. Like you're forcing a story rather than letting it flow. The style is unique and I like that. Anyway, what I got from it is that Edgar Griffith lives a 'simulation' kind of life.
Thanks :) @RavenclawUnited, though the purpose is that Edgar Griffith *is* a pretentious (egoist) person, he talks in a very over-the-top manner, he thinks he is the most intelligence, altruist person yet he actually has that misconception and his life is actually inane because of that.
Though I am new to the genre, so thanks :) It could probably flow better.