Can someone look over my essay before I turn it in? Thank you. Im worried that my thesis statement is not good
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I liked it alot. You get a medal for your hard work.. :D
Thank you. Did the thesis statement look good?? @readergirl12
@Destinyyyy , could I make a suggetion? "What they misunderstand is that making their food intake smaller does not mean that they are going on a diet." I only added the word "that" for the sentence, it seems to flow a tad bit better.
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"It seems that in today's generation, there are standards to follow in order for women to get a grasp on beauty." I added a comma and a period in this sentence, I hope I don't sound nit-picky. I'm just making suggestions. ^_^
"Beginning in Ancient Egypt the standards were: slender, narrow shoulders, high waist and a symmetrical face. " I added a colon
"From this era to post-modern beauty today the standards have been thin, full bodied, curvy, full lips, tall, boyish, small feet and a whole horde more." I switched the word horde in for bunch.
Other than that, it's perfect! ^_^
@Destinyyyy are you there?
Yes sorry.. Was taking a quiz. Let me read what you said above
Or perhaps for the last one I suggested: "From this era to post-modern beauty today the standards have been thin, full bodied, curvy, full lips, tall, boyish, small feet and a whole list more of principles."
I added in your suggestion on the comma. And I didn't notice that I didn't have a period. For the other ones I will be leaving them how that are. Thank you