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Does the start of the paragraph 4 look okay? Should I start it different?
Numerous high school graduates say, “Taking a gap year was the best decision I ever made.” (Hoder, Randye. "Why Your High School Senior Should Take a Gap Year). Though a year off is not for everyone. A gap year is what the English call a year off after high school and before college, this year off can be anything the graduate wants. Even though parents feel anxious that their child is not going straight into college after high school, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college because graduates should do more research on colleges, learn more about their intended major, travel, relax, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition. Parents can feel uneasy and doubtful of their child deciding to take a gap year instead of going straight to college like most expect to happen. The first thought they have is, “Will my child never go to college?” that’s one of the biggest fears a parent can have for their beloved offspring. After assisting and pushing their child to succeed in school for over twelve years, they don’t anticipate being asked or told that their child will not be starting college in the fall. Many high school graduates never go to college, back in 2014. “The bureau reported that 51 percent of the high school graduates who did not go on to college had jobs by October, and that 74 percent were in the labor force, meaning they either were employed or were looking for work.(”NORRIS, FLOYD. “Fewer U.S. Graduates Opt for College After High School.") Don’t stop, keep looking. Maybe your top school did not accept you or you didn’t find the school you were looking for. A gap year can give a graduate time to continue their search. Have you decided on a major? If not try doing more research before beginning classes. While taking this time to look more in depth into colleges, a graduate can take other classes like an online course or participate in other activities that can be added to a college application. By taking an online course it can help you learn more about the particular field of study you are interested in. This careful consideration may help in earning your degree or degrees in the future. For crying out loud -(Think about it)-, you’ve been in school for twelve years or more and now the time has come, you can go off and travel the world. If going traveling to exotic places isn’t making you jump up and down with excitement here are a few things you might not have thought of. A gap year can give you the opportunity to travel abroad,...
Okay the beginning is Great I love how it leads straight into the information. If you think you should try adding a few enthusiastic words in the beginning but thats your choice. Overall I love how you started it.
What about the fourth paragraph?
hmm let me see
I don't think you should start it off as for crying out loud it makes it seem like your begging
I put "Think about it" as a possible change but I dont know
Yes i was wondering why it was there it sounds much better when you put think about it
Alright thank you
Np its a great argument though.