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So I have the details and examples and stuff I want to use, but I'm having some trouble putting it into words. medal and fan to anyone who helps
Only a paragraph?
Maybe I could help, wheres your ideas?
Yup, I got everything else done it's just this one that's bugging me. Well, it's about the book Ender's Game. I have like the examples and stuff so even if you haven't read it maybe you can help. What have right now is: "Ender's Game by Orson Scott Card is an intense novel that deals with a lot of human rights issues that also happen in the real world. Issues like war and how it affects people happen every day, and are very prominent in the book. Even though those issues are shown, the issue and act of genocide is the biggest human rights issue that the book focuses on as an end result of war. "Within three seconds the entire planet burst apart." the author wrote, "becoming a sphere of bright dust, hurling outward"(Card, 303). The destruction of the world, the buggers, is described in this quote. Everything about the world was gone, turned to dust in mere seconds. The planet was not the only thing that turned to dust, though. "Where the queen was, all the queens from all their colonies, they all were there and you destroyed them completely." (Card, 303). The buggers and their whole world was destroyed." and it sucks
It isnt bad, that's actually a good start!
It could use a little revision, like maybe instead of writing "the author" you could put "Card writes,"
Basically, start with some little tiny things here and there and the result will be golden.
what other little things do i need to work on? because honestly i think all of it is pretty sucky haha
It's good though, really good. Keep it. I just spent forever trying to find something you could fix but its great
oh, okay. do you think maybe you could help with one more thing? the conclusion of the essay?
In the paragraphs above, it's easy to pull from the text that genocide is an extremely real and devastating thing that isn't just the topic or result that happens in books. It can be a result of war, or just a result of people deciding to run rampage around land. Humans are born with certain rights, such as the right to be free and live their life. The act of genocide goes against basic human rights. Ender's Game is a good illustration of how war can affect s someone, as well has how devastating genocide can be to a population.
that's what i have haha