## MTALHAHASSAN2 one year ago Need help with my poem!!

1. MTALHAHASSAN2

here is my poem: It was a nice Sunny day for playing cricket The Stadium was packed with the crowd I was next to bat, so I walked forward anxiously, Fearfully yet fearlessly, And I confidently swung the bat, and bamn! But the other side bowling team trying to make me nervous. but I make my self-believe very high, confidence. And handling the pressure well

2. MTALHAHASSAN2

can someone plz look at my poem!!

3. anonymous

Man dude that looks incredibly awesome.

4. MTALHAHASSAN2

ok thnx but do you wanna give me any advice where I want any change

5. anonymous

Yeah sure leave me to it

6. MTALHAHASSAN2

So that I can make it more better

7. anonymous

The day game for cricket could have been better Even more so with the crowd packed in the Stadium As if to summon the kingdom, the bat on my side I walked forward anxiously yet without fear And with my confidence all time high Swung the bat, against the sea of bowling enemy Shouting and threatening calls of dread Yet, to embrace the moment of execution I, with my duty, stepped in to the challenge

8. anonymous

*couldn't have been

9. anonymous

How do you like my rephrasing?

10. anonymous

Gotta love poetry eh?

11. anonymous

Just play around with "the" and change it to however you like

12. anonymous

My dream come true in this day of cricket game Amid the applaud of jam packed crowd I, with full determination, stepped in to show The ever lasting dread of my enemy willing to gnaw Embracing my confidence all time high In this day of challenge never up I give With bat on my side, with pitcher on the other The battle of focus between the us two Summoning the incredulous bravery of spirit I, with full eagle, plunge into the deed.

13. anonymous

How do you make out of that one?

14. MTALHAHASSAN2

nice!!

15. anonymous

I am glad my friend! Choose which ever you feel like it.

16. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 thnx a lot

17. anonymous

Anytime

18. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 Iam goona choose this one because it makes more sence but the problem is that I need one more sentence for it like they are 9 sentences I need 10!!

19. MTALHAHASSAN2

For this one The day game for cricket could have been better Even more so with the crowd packed in the Stadium As if to summon the kingdom, the bat on my side I walked forward anxiously yet without fear And with my confidence all time high Swung the bat, against the sea of bowling enemy Shouting and threatening calls of dread Yet, to embrace the moment of execution I, with my duty, stepped in to the challenge

20. anonymous

To the eventual success yet to be made.

21. anonymous

This is the last one.

22. anonymous

23. MTALHAHASSAN2

ok

24. MTALHAHASSAN2

what be a good topic for it

25. anonymous

The judgement day

26. anonymous

lol I am so flashy today

27. anonymous

The Judgment Day

28. anonymous

Just to be clear on capitalization

29. anonymous

I bet you will get A+ lol

30. MTALHAHASSAN2

so the topic be the judgement day right

31. anonymous

yup

32. MTALHAHASSAN2

the last question be that how can I write a reflective journal of approximately 200 words in which you discuss the word choices you made and what effect you wanted to achieve.

33. anonymous

Ok. Do you want me to give you a sample?

34. MTALHAHASSAN2

ok sure

35. anonymous

Are you trying to make a poem, @MTALHAHASSAN2?

36. MTALHAHASSAN2

yes

37. MTALHAHASSAN2

38. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 help me a lot

39. MTALHAHASSAN2

can you plz look at if you don't mind

40. anonymous

@MTALHAHASSAN2 Where are you from?

41. anonymous

ok

42. MTALHAHASSAN2

Pakistan

43. anonymous

One hour ahead of me, ok

44. MTALHAHASSAN2

where u from

45. MTALHAHASSAN2

46. anonymous

Pakistan as well, but I live in Dubai

47. anonymous

Haha

48. anonymous

I personally dedicate this poem as a memoir to my cricket game. Throughout the poem I ensured that each word picked carries a connotative significance. For example, the title "Judgement Day" provokes a feeling of tension as I face the adversity which stood in front of me. Moreover "packed with crowd" in the Stadium implies that I am being watched by thousands of people expecting me to perform. Amid the fear of failure I had word the poem in a risky way which may possibly come off as overly melodramatic however to those with similar experience would resonate. As such the conclusion of poem leaves a piece of foreshadowing to be done as the reader would ponder what happened after the conclusion, and such is my ambiguity and ambivalence of my poem, which will peg my memory in the board of life which now I have worked hard to keep.

49. MTALHAHASSAN2

I like to live in dubai

50. anonymous

Guys take that I bet that's super duper melodramatic

51. anonymous

:D

52. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 where u from

53. anonymous

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54. anonymous

55. MTALHAHASSAN2

really

56. MTALHAHASSAN2

Which province

57. anonymous

Ontario

58. anonymous

59. MTALHAHASSAN2

because I also live in Canada

60. anonymous

nice.

61. anonymous

we'd make good friends

62. MTALHAHASSAN2

lol it is the same province man

63. MTALHAHASSAN2

which city

64. anonymous

toronto area

65. anonymous

by the way how did you like the reflection?

66. MTALHAHASSAN2

I live in Mississauga

67. anonymous

my brain is on fire today with English

68. anonymous

nice.

69. MTALHAHASSAN2

that's good

70. anonymous

glad you found it as such

71. anonymous

I struggle with computer science

72. MTALHAHASSAN2

73. MTALHAHASSAN2

in which university are you

74. MTALHAHASSAN2

In english the most thing which I hate is the poem

75. anonymous

lol poem is like being a drama girl

76. MTALHAHASSAN2

its take a lot of time to understand

77. anonymous

and I love it

78. MTALHAHASSAN2

idk for me its hard

79. anonymous

well, it takes time and practice

80. anonymous

learn spanish

81. anonymous

makes it easier to understand english

82. MTALHAHASSAN2

do we have to learn poem in Uni

83. MTALHAHASSAN2

University

84. anonymous

no

85. anonymous

you can take a course on pornography

86. MTALHAHASSAN2

good

87. anonymous

XD

88. MTALHAHASSAN2

but then why they teach poem in high school

89. MTALHAHASSAN2

waste to time

90. anonymous

so that they can masturbate more effectively with better imagination

91. MTALHAHASSAN2

of

92. anonymous

just kidding

93. MTALHAHASSAN2

@MANaALASKer how is study in dubai

94. anonymous

Hey does anyone here know how to use the Java program? I literally suck

95. MTALHAHASSAN2

sorry I don't

96. anonymous

no problem

97. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 do you read a novel called brick lane

98. anonymous

Nope

99. anonymous

no sorry

100. MTALHAHASSAN2

ok

101. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Robert136 I need little bit for journey about it so what can I include

102. MTALHAHASSAN2

more

103. anonymous

^^ btw, nice poem

104. MTALHAHASSAN2

@bubbleslove1234 the question is that I have to write a short poem of approximately 10 lines describing an important event (either personal or historical) or an emotional state of mind using rich, connotative language which I almost finish but I wanna show you my that poem!!

105. MTALHAHASSAN2

Here is my poem: The Judgment Day The day game for cricket could have been better Even more so with the crowd packed in the Stadium As if to summon the kingdom, the bat on my side I walked forward anxiously yet without fear And with my confidence all time high Swung the bat, against the sea of bowling enemy Shouting and threatening calls of dread Yet, to embrace the moment of execution I, with my duty, stepped in to the challenge To the eventual success yet has to be made.

106. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Abhisar

107. MTALHAHASSAN2

@imqwerty

108. MTALHAHASSAN2

Is it a good poem?

109. imqwerty

tbh idk ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

110. MTALHAHASSAN2

111. imqwerty

@UsukiDoll

112. UsukiDoll

@imqwerty idk either .

113. MTALHAHASSAN2

lol but are you familar with the poems

114. imqwerty

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115. MTALHAHASSAN2

what is that

116. imqwerty

Thats jst - ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ ^

117. MTALHAHASSAN2

o hello I need help

118. Michele_Laino

I'm very sorry, I'm not good with writing

119. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Michele_Laino the question is that I have to write a short poem of approximately 10 lines describing an important event (either personal or historical) or an emotional state of mind using rich, connotative language which I almost finish but I wanna show you my that poem!!

120. MTALHAHASSAN2

oh ok

121. MTALHAHASSAN2

@Rushwr's

122. MTALHAHASSAN2

123. MTALHAHASSAN2

@bubbleslove1234 check that document

124. anonymous

i personlly thought it was amazing bacause of the details you used

125. anonymous

well do you think that it needs anything

126. MTALHAHASSAN2

Idk

127. anonymous

i think it is great

128. MTALHAHASSAN2

but I have to make my paragraph with 200 word

129. MTALHAHASSAN2

that's only 150

130. MTALHAHASSAN2

I need 50 more words

131. MTALHAHASSAN2

but I don't what to write more

132. anonymous

well than make the sentences longer.....but you dont want to make it to boring

133. MTALHAHASSAN2

but then what can I do

134. anonymous

gtg be back

135. MTALHAHASSAN2

ok