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Proof read my essay? Mainly punctuation. I realize that its terrible, but at this point I just needed an essay. :p Caesar is dead! There was a conspiracy down at the senate! I hear that Brutus, one of Caesars closest friends, was even part of it! This is the beginning of when people started to think of Brutus as either a patriot or a traitor. Brutus's decisions concerning Rome effect it even today. However, he could also be a patriot because he was doing what he thought, was good for Rome and its people. What Brutus did made him a traitor because his lack of information, cowardice, and rash thinking. He was a patriot! He did it for Rome and its citizens! He was doing what he believed the people wanted! He had even received letters addressing the concerns involving Caesar! All of those reasons are true but he didn’t ask the people himself. He received the letters but didn’t hear it straight from the mouth of the people. You could also fight that he put others before himself. He had killed Caesar with a heavy heart and truly mourned his friend’s death. Then you look at the speech he gave at Caesars funeral. He focused the speech on himself and tried his best to convince the people that what he had done was right and justified. Though Caesar was an honorable man, Brutus felt that Caesar’s future could prove troubling. Brutus is a traitor because he didn’t look at all of the facts. He let Cassius persuade him into killing Caesar with little effort. He could have thought more on the subject; taking his own opinion and not just everyone else’s. For example, Caesar was at the town center and Antony offers him the crown not once, but twice! Caesar still turned it down. His plan wasn’t to become king, but to make Rome a better place. After Caesars death, a war breaks out between Antony and Octavian vs Cassius and Brutus. During this fight Brutus realizes that he is losing and decides to kill himself. He didn’t want to be captured alive. He took the easy way out. He didn’t want to be punished for what he did and he didn’t want to live with the guilt of killing Caesar. He was holding on to his excuses until the end; fearing that he had made the wrong decision. With his dying words he said Caesar, now be still: I kill’d not thee with half so good a will. In the end did Brutus kill Caesar for the good of Rome or did he do it because of his lack of information, cowardice, and rash thinking. There are arguments debating whether or not Brutus is a patriot or a traitor, but looking further into the matter it has been concluded that he was a traitor. Brutus should have looked further into the matter before acting. If he had thought through his decision what do you think he would have done?

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  1. SolomonZelman
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    Caesar's

  2. SolomonZelman
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    (in line 2)

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    All of those reasons are true\(\LARGE\color{red}{,}\) but he didn’t ask the people himself.

  4. SolomonZelman
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    (line 3, in paragraph 2)

  5. SolomonZelman
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    Same in the very last sentence of paragraph 2: He received the letters\(\LARGE\color{red}{,}\) but didn’t hear it straight from the mouth of the people. (B/c independent and dependent clauses are separated by comma)

  6. SolomonZelman
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    Caesar's ---> of Caesar, or something that belongs to Caesar and NOT: "Caesars" ---> two or more Caesars.

  7. SolomonZelman
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    so it always has to have an apostrophe there.

  8. SolomonZelman
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    Sentence 3: ``` He could have thought more on the subject; taking his own opinion and not just everyone else’s. ``` No semi-colon, just a comma, because the second clause is NOT indpendent. (Semi-colon is only for the purpose of joining two independent clauses together in a sentence. Comma is better there instead.)

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    or even, it is not a clause in a second part after "taking", but should contain a comma as an adverbial phrase.

  10. SolomonZelman
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    in any case, THERE ^^, a comma, not semi colon.

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    For example, Caesar was at the town center and Antony `offers` him the crown not once, but twice! that should be `offered` (to maintain "parallelism")

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    After Caesars death, a war breaks out between Antony and Octavian `vs` Cassius and Brutus. Never use acronyms in an essay! `verses` or `against` can be better alternatives for using "vs".

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    With his dying words he said \(\color{blue}{"}\)Caesar, now be still: I kill’d not thee with half so good a will.\(\color{blue}{"}\)

  14. SolomonZelman
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    You are quoting, so should put the quotation marks around the quote.

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    The very beginning of the last paragraph: `In the end`\(\LARGE \color{blue}{,}\) Comma - b/c it is a transition

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    On more comma: In the end\(\LARGE\color{blue}{\rm , }\) did Brutus kill Caesar for the good of Rome\(\LARGE\color{blue}{\rm , }\) or did he do it because of his lack of information, cowardice, and rash thinking.

  17. SolomonZelman
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    I like your end in a rethorical question:)

  18. SolomonZelman
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    Hope my little input helps.

  19. anonymous
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    Its helps a lot! Thank you a bunch!

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