1. SolomonZelman

Caesar's

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(in line 2)

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All of those reasons are true$$\LARGE\color{red}{,}$$ but he didn’t ask the people himself.

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(line 3, in paragraph 2)

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Same in the very last sentence of paragraph 2: He received the letters$$\LARGE\color{red}{,}$$ but didn’t hear it straight from the mouth of the people. (B/c independent and dependent clauses are separated by comma)

6. SolomonZelman

Caesar's ---> of Caesar, or something that belongs to Caesar and NOT: "Caesars" ---> two or more Caesars.

7. SolomonZelman

so it always has to have an apostrophe there.

8. SolomonZelman

Sentence 3:  He could have thought more on the subject; taking his own opinion and not just everyone else’s.  No semi-colon, just a comma, because the second clause is NOT indpendent. (Semi-colon is only for the purpose of joining two independent clauses together in a sentence. Comma is better there instead.)

9. SolomonZelman

or even, it is not a clause in a second part after "taking", but should contain a comma as an adverbial phrase.

10. SolomonZelman

in any case, THERE ^^, a comma, not semi colon.

11. SolomonZelman

For example, Caesar was at the town center and Antony offers him the crown not once, but twice! that should be offered (to maintain "parallelism")

12. SolomonZelman

After Caesars death, a war breaks out between Antony and Octavian vs Cassius and Brutus. Never use acronyms in an essay! verses or against can be better alternatives for using "vs".

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With his dying words he said $$\color{blue}{"}$$Caesar, now be still: I kill’d not thee with half so good a will.$$\color{blue}{"}$$

14. SolomonZelman

You are quoting, so should put the quotation marks around the quote.

15. SolomonZelman

The very beginning of the last paragraph: In the end$$\LARGE \color{blue}{,}$$ Comma - b/c it is a transition

16. SolomonZelman

On more comma: In the end$$\LARGE\color{blue}{\rm , }$$ did Brutus kill Caesar for the good of Rome$$\LARGE\color{blue}{\rm , }$$ or did he do it because of his lack of information, cowardice, and rash thinking.

17. SolomonZelman

I like your end in a rethorical question:)

18. SolomonZelman

Hope my little input helps.

19. anonymous

Its helps a lot! Thank you a bunch!