Let me know what you think of my new story, I will post the info in the comments. Feedback is appreciated, thx so much! :)
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It all started in that hallway…
-“I had just greeted a few of my friends and headed towards my locker, and a shiver went up my spine, like someone was watching me. I turned and saw him glancing at me. He smiled shyly, and turned away, going to class. I have never seen him around anywhere. Who was this boy, and will I ever get to meet him?” -
-“I had seen her around town the few weeks I have been there. She is the most beautiful girl I have ever seen in my life. I can’t believe she caught me staring at her in the halls. I told myself I was going to go up to her, but guess who chickened out? Yep, you guessed it. I wish there was a way for me to actually get to know her….”-
Fate will bring the Cowboy and the Angel together, and you’ll have to wait and see what’s in store for their adventure.
This is the link to the story. :) https://www.wattpad.com/story/49878961-~cowboys-and-angels~
This is wonderful so far!!
By reading the title, one may think that the girl is the angel and the boy is the cowboy, but by your description in the beginning of Annastasia putting on her western boots, it looks like this story going to be a fun ride with a twist!
I love your descriptions a lot as well - they're very vivid. You can really imagine the characters as if you were looking straight at them, and the way they speak is very realistic, especially when Laura and Annastasia were complimenting each-other.
I also like the characters' actions, just as how the boy noticed Annastasia looking at him and he "smiled shyly and lowered his gaze".
This hints his personality well and may give the reader an idea that Annastasia may be headstrong and ready for anything ("I wanted to know more about this boy, but before I could go over there" shows that she isn't the shyest, and isn't lowering her gaze or quickly looking away. She's brave in the way that she would go up and introduce herself, etc), as well as hinting that the boy might be her exact opposite.
Anyways, spectacular job! Your story is very intriguing, well organized, and I can't wait for another page!