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 one year ago
Is there someone here that could help me now?
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 one year ago
Is there someone here that could help me now?

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YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Hi, what do you need help with? :)

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I have a paragraph that I need to purify

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Well, post it here and I can see if I can help you ^_^

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1here it is. It's a pic. I don't want google to capture it. My teacher might find it later and gonna think I plagiarized it.... who knows... I don't want to risk it....

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Ok, I may pop out a couple times cuz my mom's here, but I'll be back so don't worry

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I write horrible... : I know...

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Is there a prompt?

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1It's gonna be a narrative about my life

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1When I was diagnosed with diabetes

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1boring stuff, but I want to make it interesting

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Ok, first off, you don't want to use "you" in an essay. :D

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Replace it with "one" or "a person"

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2So: ...pretty much anything sweet one can think of. or: ...pretty much anything sweet a person can think of.

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1my audience is another classmate btw

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1You could just mention which sentence doesn't sound too great

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I just need a second perspective

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Are we going for a casual or professional sounding essay?

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1it's not a science paper

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1Writing something boring and professional is easier I think. lol

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I think the last sentence sounds more like a poem. Is it okay?

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I wanted to do something different

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2I think the last sentence is ok, but the first sentence, you use the word "sweet" twice. Here's a tip, when writing, try not to use the same word too much, try finding synonyms. So replace "...pretty much anything sweet" with "...pretty much anything sugary" or "...pretty much anything sugar filled"

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Using the same word too many times makes the essay seem boring and repetitive.

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1Good suggestion, I didn't even notice that. Thanks

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1Overall, could I know what your first impression was? lame? boring? interesting? Nay or yay?

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2I thought it was interesting.

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2It just needs a little editing is all. :)

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I still have to write a second intro anyways. My teacher wants me to take a different approach.

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Ah ok. I'm gonna see what we can edit. :)

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I'll have to take two intros to class today...

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Be right back, my mom wants me to fold some clothes quick, but I'll be back! ^u^

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1Is there anything else I should edit? before I start working on my second "different" version?

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Well, I was thinking: "...all my careless childhood days have suddenly vanished" and replace the word "have" with the word "just"

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1Ok, make it more present time...

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2or the word "had" I'm not sure when this took place...

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1It's a childhood memory...

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2I was suggesting "just" because it makes it seem more dramatic. But maybe that's just my novelist side inputting stuff. :P

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I really needed this. Thank you.

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I'm gonna go eat breakfast now. :)

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2:D Okay. :) Do you need anymore help or no?

Blank
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.1I might come back later...I don't know for sure though

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2Okay, tag me if you need help. :)

YoungStudier
 one year ago
Best ResponseYou've already chosen the best response.2You're welcome! ^u^
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