can someone plz look at my essay

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what do you want to know about it cause its really good
plz look at my grammar and spelling mistake
kk
and look at my sentence structure is it making scence or not
it has good structure and a helpful hint for second-guessing yourself w/ spelling simple just look it up
Im correcting sentence structure now. What is 'maladies'?
oh yeah it be the malaria disease
So is it supposed to be there?
Maybe use abnormalities instead.
yeah it was has to be there because smoke also effects the malaria disease
@Whitelynx ok but what about the whole essay is it look good or
Overall, the essay is pretty dang good. You have good, structured paragraphs, and pretty sound arguments. Occasionally your sentences are confusing though. For instance: "such as people smoking last for five years will damage their respiratory system" is bad grammar. what should we replace it with?
Your essay structure as a whole is pretty clean too.
@Whitelynx do you want me to delete that sentence
No. I think we should change it.
how??
any idea?
Ill put corrections in red. Ill send it to you soon. I barely changed the sentence.
Just give me a bit.
ok fine
"cigar smokers who inhale" I think we should get rid of "who inhale" but I'm not actually going to take anything like that out incase you want to leave it. Im just going to strikethrough it.
Actually, I'll underline stuff I'm not sure about. Anything that you should get rid of will be strikethroughed
ok fine
wait are you goona send me the document or what
Yeah. Sorry its taking so long. Im being careful with my check.
no worry its fine and by the way thnx for helping and giving ur time
No problem bro. You ended one of your paragraphs with "Compared to non-smokers, cigar smokers who inhale deeply." which is an incomplete sentence.
Dued wanna know a good site ??
good site for what
http://www.reverso.net/spell-checker/english-spelling-grammar/ take chunks and paste it in and check it works!!
to check grammar and punctuation
is it free
ok thnx
yes :) fan and medal for help in future to I'm good at science
o and math but more science guy :)
@Whitelynx are you still here
yes I'm back
o need help or naw from me??
You should indent the first line of each new paragraph
what you mean by indent
indent=type tab
dued let me see the paper?
Attach Brb
ok bck let see
wen i click it nothing pops up for me but on the top is says "Untitled"
1 Attachment
" In some caught smoke also help the elders because" what do you mean?
is one is better
yes and indent 1st line
Example of indentation: (click tab here)Smoking cigarettes should be made illegal in Canada. According to the Health Canada, Cigarette smoke kills over 37,000 people in Canada each year. That's more than the amount of all murders, alcohol-related deaths, car accidents and suicides. The inquiry has also shown that, in 2002, about 17% of deaths were due to smoking (20% in males and 12% in females).
what you mean click tab here
on your key board thats how you indent
do you have a google dox account
I can correct it on that easy
yeah i do
ok paste it on a google dox and then make it by sharing it and make the link public,everyone can view then paste like in the box
here 1 sec
https://docs.google.com/a/bsd220.org/document/d/1W7MXNXQgARadFdWoz9nJc40KmvIrG5kD3M22B4A8UVc/edit?usp=sharing
Aye. Finished corrections. here.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ODP9AT8P3PKCWzmFxJqW8A0mbUHpvzQew1-Flv5zNmU/edit
i don't think u got all of them-_-
Does your teacher require mla format? If so, you need to re-do your bibliography portion so that it includes all the necessary information
MTALH got to this link >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W7MXNXQgARadFdWoz9nJc40KmvIrG5kD3M22B4A8UVc/edit?usp=sharing
I have to sleep now. I got almost all of your mistakes. Red is my corrections red with a line is stuff you should delete, and red with underlined is stuff I'm not sure of. The others can help with the rest. Night!
White r u sure you got everything
@Whitelynx i can't open ur document thou
Almost positive. Go over it again though. his last paragraphs were choppy, so I did a lot there.
Read second sentence-_-
Meh. Go over it. Night.
MTH r u on this link ?
Night Bruh
yes i am
ok just look how i correct it ok?
ok fine
hey can u chat so i can ask you some questions
ok
smoke?
wat?
kills? or killed Ps when I ask u a question go back to the doc to see what I'm asking you ok?
idk i will say killed
what you think
killed sounds right
bruh i need to hurry ok it almost midnight need to sleep
ok i know i also have to go
lets do it
what is yello fever
nvm do u know what tar is
oh yeah i know
the black thing in the ciagrees
right
Yh
its be tar not ta
i mean in the document you put ta
does this have to have a certain amount of paragraphs and is this due tommaro?
lol its due tonight
ok and is there a paragraph climate?
is has to be 750 to 100 words i guess so
stupid auto correct limate
wait 75 to 100 word!
word!?
750
ok
Potential Essay Topics: Essay Length: 750-100 Words
ps this might take a while so hold on tight for me ok your ideas are all over the place
ok no worry i am here
wait so what solution are u talking about?
and it wouldn't save money but would help with keeping your body fit
ok so they only ban the smoking ciagrees in the family place which is good to be safe from smoking but i am saying its not a properly way to safe from the smoking we have to do something else for being safe
ok sohal
no I know what your talking about I'm past that
oh ok
Tip Don't use first,second,third,etc
ok find better transition words
why not but these are the transition words thou
know where are we
ok done with first two paragraphs
thanks gud
thnx a lot
done with 3rd also
good
I don't think cigarets are waste of money to the government
dued I really need to leave in like 10 min hopefully I finish we wills ok
i know its waste of our own money thou
we will see
o thats what u meant to say ok
we have to pay for medication etc
acually there is no medication for tar in the lungs
oh really
wait do you use that grammar website
I am now I'm freaking tired AF
just for the last 2 paragraphs of so
lol its almost done man
you can do it
I know i got you ill finish it
why the way are you muslim
I mean some of you thesis statements are off but there workable
yes I am XD
nice
just delete that line
Dude your so lucky that whitlynx never checked it or you would be screwed
wait how is it the waste of the consumers money
if people smoke alot then the consumers get more money
inshallah you will get a reward from allah for helping
thnx a lot man and may god bless you
hey dude how many words does it have to be?
750 to 100 i guess so
ok 687 or something like that and I'm Done :)
so copy and paste that into a word document
what grade r u in
lol thnx a lot
np wat grade r u in?:)
I dont judge
I'm just curious
12
actually english is not my first language so
O kool hey dude fan me for future help I don't really care if you want to give me a medal you can but it don't matter to me
Mine either Hindi is mine
so are you from India
no i was born in the Us,Illinois
hey got ps3?
ok ima go to sleep but fan me so I can help u in the future
why lol
because i could play with u i got a mic
hello?
bye then XD
Find the verb in the sentence (GAVE) Ask "What was given?" (The blue ribbon) Ask " Who was given the blue ribbon?" (Rosa) I used this and it helped A LOT! I got 100s on a bunch of tests. :)

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